Comic 70 - Chapter 3 - Page 1

21st Jun 2012, 6:00 AM in Chapter 3
Chapter 3 - Page 1
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Author Notes:

TheGhost 21st Jun 2012, 6:00 AM edit delete
TheGhost
Faced more challenges on this page: exaggerated foreshortening and perspectives. They have always been weaknesses of mine, but I know the comic will force me to take on those challenges.

EDIT: I have received comments elsewhere that the door looks EXTREMELY tall. That's really my fault with the over-exaggeration. The knockers are actually eye level. They’re supposed to be taking in the towering scope of the door.
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Comments:

fimarach 21st Jun 2012, 8:36 AM edit delete reply
fimarach
I love your artwork and concept, but you need seriously help with pacing. Close to twenty pages from dropping the group off til they get to the front door? And very little going on in most of those pages.
TheGhost 21st Jun 2012, 11:15 AM edit delete reply
TheGhost
The last chapter was more about the journey than the destination. I wanted to focus on the characters and their interactions. They're subtle moments, but I wanted to show more of their personalities before I introduce the characters inside the castle.

Pacing has been something I'm constantly balancing between the script and pages. I don't want to rush things for a quick payoff. I guess it comes from my love of animated shows. I want to treat my chapters like individual episodes, each one with a beginning, middle, and end.
Drobvirks 23rd Jun 2012, 5:06 PM edit delete reply
Drobvirks
I've honestly had no problem with the pacing of the comic so far. I'm really glad you're taking the time developing these characters and their personalities.

I know the comic might seem slow because you might not update that often. But if you read it all in a bundle it goes by in no time!
MAXORAPRODUCTIONS 9th Mar 2018, 10:56 AM edit delete reply
I can relate to this! It is what we are doing with our comic as well! Though it is a shorter comic as I aim it more for a younger audience but we still treat it like animated shows.
Red Jack 9th Mar 2017, 12:28 PM edit delete reply
Red Jack
Nothing wrong with the pacing at all.
I'm still just worried about how this story is going to unfold down the line. Hoping it's not gonna basically be like Questionable Content.
chris-tar 21st Jun 2012, 3:52 PM edit delete reply
chris-tar
I see nothing wrong with you slowly unfolding the story and carefully fleshing out each character. It's what I call an "Uncompressed story line".
OnlyFoolsAndVikings 21st Jun 2012, 4:37 PM edit delete reply
OnlyFoolsAndVikings
Personally, I didn't mind the pacing, it did get a little slow for me towards the end, but that didn't really matter. :U

Also I think you handled the foreshortening in this page really well! C:

And now for the spooky, spooky door.
CrackaWindow 21st Jun 2012, 6:12 PM edit delete reply
CrackaWindow
This page is a representation of everything I hate artistically, ie foreshortening and architecture. It looks magnificent though, quite stunning. You did a great job. :D

Also, I find pacing to be a very difficult issue for me in my stories too. I want so badly to develop relationships between the characters, but having plot happen at the same time too to keep things exciting and move the story along... Iunno, but it's a constant battle for me. :S

skorpen 25th Jun 2012, 10:22 AM edit delete reply
skorpen
Overall I think the pacing is great. You've given us a very engrossing steady stream of discoveries large and small. However I think you could have done without the first panel of this page, which gives almost identical information as the last 2 pages (including the chapter cover.) And then with no significant developments in the following panels, I can see how this page might stall.
TheGhost 25th Jun 2012, 9:40 PM edit delete reply
TheGhost
Yeah, I was worried about that. I looked at like the beginning of a new episode in a TV series, with a short recap of the last episode's ending scene to help recapture the mood. The original chapter cover didn't have the castle, but I changed it at the last moment. After this chapter, the following ones will be self-contained stories, so I hope I won't run into this problem again.
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